Saturday, February 28, 2009
ER - Comlicated
Another fine example in my ongoing quest to show that regular business people need help proofreading. I think we all need help proofreading.
Saturday, February 14, 2009
The check is in the mail
"The check will be in the mail tomorrow!
Thanks Dr. Dave.
As soon as biz picks up I will ask you to review my website.
Thanks again!"
Peter B.
Thanks Dr. Dave.
As soon as biz picks up I will ask you to review my website.
Thanks again!"
Peter B.
GLOWING TESTIMONIAL
"I asked David (www.yourmessagedoctor.com ) to review my statement of purpose. His response was prompt, encouraging, and very helpful without being condescending. I highly recommend him and intend to use his service again."
William H Langford
CEO
whlangford.com
William H Langford
CEO
whlangford.com
ER - Latest Cases
Here are a couple of the latest cases for my Emergency Room.
I forgot to mention, or highlight, the word curious in the line that starts: Just curiuos ...
I do this a lot lately myself. I think it's because we're always live, On Air, and moments over deadline.
I don't worry too much about this kind of thing except if you do. If you're trying to go pro, then take it a little slow. Preventative proofreading - it's easy on the budget and tastes good, too.
I forgot to mention, or highlight, the word curious in the line that starts: Just curiuos ...
I do this a lot lately myself. I think it's because we're always live, On Air, and moments over deadline.
I don't worry too much about this kind of thing except if you do. If you're trying to go pro, then take it a little slow. Preventative proofreading - it's easy on the budget and tastes good, too.
Thursday, February 12, 2009
A brand new classified ad
The top paragraph is what Peter was using, but the phone wasn’t ringing as much as he thought it should be. We talked about taking out the CAPS, phone number placement, and adding value item by item.
The new ad, including the Q and A emails, took less than an hour. I asked him to tell me as soon as the phone rings. I can probably prescribe something for you, too.
Original ad
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Computer repair for $90 or LESS?
That’s right. Here at RandomPCRepair.com my goal is to give you an affordable, honest solution to those ridiculously high prices you’ll pay elsewhere. YOU WON’T PAY MORE THAN $90! THAT’S NOT PER HOUR, THAT’S THE TOTAL PRICE YOU PAY FOR LABOR. I WILL take care of you and give you the courteous service you deserve and I guarantee my work. If it has viruses or spyware I WILL remove it and advise you on how to keep it from reoccurring! And my labor is only UP TO $90. If it needs parts it’s UP TO $90 + parts. NO MATTER WHAT THE PROBLEM IS IT WILL NEVER COST YOU MORE THAN $90. Check out my website at RandomPCRepair.com! I also offer FREE PICK-UP SERVICE. NO TRIP CHARGE! Or you can drop it off. I serve Milwaukee, Ozaukee and Sheboygan counties. Call me at (414)208-4150, email me at Peter@RandomPCRepair.com or visit me at my website: RandomPCRepair.com
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A new prescription.
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Computer repair, clean and defrag for $90 or less? Free pickup and delivery for Milwaukee, Ozaukee and Sheboygan counties. Call 414-208-4150. A clean, defragged drive almost always runs faster. We include removal of viruses and spyware with hard drive back up and system restore, if necessary. Memory upgrades, system upgrades, hardware replacement, or any other parts are quoted and approved by you before we proceed. A full report of work is included along with my guarantee. If I can’t fix it you don’t pay. Maximum labor cost is only $90 and parts, if needed, are at cost. Call 414-208-4150, email: peter@randompcrepair.com or visit: www. RandomPCRepair.Com
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The new ad, including the Q and A emails, took less than an hour. I asked him to tell me as soon as the phone rings. I can probably prescribe something for you, too.
Original ad
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Computer repair for $90 or LESS?
That’s right. Here at RandomPCRepair.com my goal is to give you an affordable, honest solution to those ridiculously high prices you’ll pay elsewhere. YOU WON’T PAY MORE THAN $90! THAT’S NOT PER HOUR, THAT’S THE TOTAL PRICE YOU PAY FOR LABOR. I WILL take care of you and give you the courteous service you deserve and I guarantee my work. If it has viruses or spyware I WILL remove it and advise you on how to keep it from reoccurring! And my labor is only UP TO $90. If it needs parts it’s UP TO $90 + parts. NO MATTER WHAT THE PROBLEM IS IT WILL NEVER COST YOU MORE THAN $90. Check out my website at RandomPCRepair.com! I also offer FREE PICK-UP SERVICE. NO TRIP CHARGE! Or you can drop it off. I serve Milwaukee, Ozaukee and Sheboygan counties. Call me at (414)208-4150, email me at Peter@RandomPCRepair.com or visit me at my website: RandomPCRepair.com
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A new prescription.
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Computer repair, clean and defrag for $90 or less? Free pickup and delivery for Milwaukee, Ozaukee and Sheboygan counties. Call 414-208-4150. A clean, defragged drive almost always runs faster. We include removal of viruses and spyware with hard drive back up and system restore, if necessary. Memory upgrades, system upgrades, hardware replacement, or any other parts are quoted and approved by you before we proceed. A full report of work is included along with my guarantee. If I can’t fix it you don’t pay. Maximum labor cost is only $90 and parts, if needed, are at cost. Call 414-208-4150, email: peter@randompcrepair.com or visit: www. RandomPCRepair.Com
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