Where does your eye travel first? Second?

THIS IS A DRAFT. Click to enlarge photo.

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Dee and I are inviting people to a wonderful couple workshops coming up. I did this quickie, rough draft of design changes to her front page in order to show her how people read and click through.

Your Message Doctor is not limited to words.
Let's do better work and have more fun.

P.S.
This draft was mostly done with screen shots opened into a page in Illustrator. The yellow box/text was added in Illustrator, and another screen shot was taken. Then, the Before and After were lined up for a final shot.

ER - Mis-managment

Besides the misspelling of management, in blue highlight, there's another little thing in here. We'll let it ride for now. There's only so much we can do at any one time.

ER - More than just an Admnistrator

Administrator - not admnistrator.

The Doctor says, "Get a checkup."
It will add years and dollars to your business life.

ER - ... attention *TO* detail.

Another Happy Customer

Hi David,

Thank you for reviewing my online profile and making suggestions about what to change. I appreciate the time you spent examining my profile and will definitely make some changes per your recommendations.

Jim

ER - Oops - broken link - cash down drain

I was just passing along a recommendation from Burt to the JoeNetworks group who suggested they read Book Yourself Solid by Michael Port. I've read it and think it's worth your time to check into it.

However .....

http://www.bookyourselfsolid.com has a link to a blog which does not work.

Firefox can't find the server at blog.bookyourselfsolid.com !!!

I guess they need a proofreader, eh? Yoo Hoo - Michael ....

DavidWhite@YourMessageDoctor.com at your service.

And, for those of you keeping track at home - yes, I did tell Michael Port about it. That's my job.

ER - How to Create Better Passwords (or Why)

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The instructions read: The password must be at least 6 alphanumeric characters with one of the characters being a number. I feel like I need an alphanumeric calculator to pass this quiz - just to sign in to get what ever you're promising. It better be good.

However, the instructions became available only after I was wrong. After I could not guess.

If you have parameters for your new clients and guests, please tell them what they are BEFORE you make them think about it and enter it again. Don't make them wrong before they get started.

This speaks about you and your organization whether you know it or not. This is part of the message and this needs doctoring.

A note about Shelfari.com

Shelfari is social networking for readers of books. I am a new user and there are aspects of actual networking that I have not begun to touch.

If you are going to start listing books you've read - start with the oldest first.

Some functionality with re-ordering a list could be improved. Maybe it's my browser. One way to get around this is to enter the oldest book first.

I keep finding and remembering older books and I wish I could more easily put them at the end of the list.


http://www.shelfari.com/davidlwhite/shelf

ER - Your Message Doctor examines your entire message

Whether there is language that needs attention in this text block is a question that comes after a simple browser check. How does it look? Your Message Doctor can examine your entire message.

I don't know what else to say. Of all the places to buy whatever he's selling why would I go to a guy that can't do a browser check? What is he going to miss on MY job if he cannot do his own work right? Right?

What does your message say about you? Let's take a look.